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Apr
4
2016

Frequency and Echoes; Redundancy and Repetition -- by Lydia Harris

In the course of critiquing more than eight hundred stories, I've found myself often mentioning four major writing issues: frequency, echoes, redundancy and repetition. Moreover, it has become clear how often my own stories suffer from the same obstacles to clean, clear, concise and succinct writing.

Frequency refers to specific words, types of speech, and/or phrases a writer uses repeatedly. Some common ones are "just", "so", "as", "that", "then", "glance" and "smile". Sometimes it is a phrase, such as "in fact" or even in a dialogue tag, such as "(s)he told him/her". Similar problems come with the overuse of modifiers, such as adverbs ("-ly"). My own personal nemesis is the reoccurrence of filter words, such as "thought", "wondered", "remembered" and "realized". Recently I've been surprised by the overuse of "up" in phrases: "stood up", "hold up", "picked up", and "straightened up". This is probably a product of how our everyday language is changing, but we writers know speech is not dialogue or narrative.

Running a story through a word/phrase counter is an easy remedy and can be useful when used in conjunction with the search function of your word processor (http://www.writewords.org.uk/word_count.asp). Frequency statistics are also available in CC's Novel System, as part of writing programs (such as Scrivener) or editing software (https://prowritingaid.com/) . Remember, you may not want/need to edit every occurrence. Consider the context and what sounds right for your work.

Echoes are closely related to frequency in that it refers to the same word appearing in close proximity to a reappearance of the same word. (See the echoes?) Of course, frequency and echoes often occur accidentally when we writers are fast drafting and need to get the ideas down on paper. You might want to try highlighting the second (or third?) usage to make sure you can reassess during the revision/editing phase.

Redundancy involves the usage of words that can be deleted without losing meaning. For example: "Tom picked up the orb from the table with his hands." Unless Tom is a special type of entity, the reader will assume he used his hands and deleting the phrase will not adversely affect the reader's interpretation. Of course, if Tom is a six-legged, four-handed, eight-foot beetle, all bets are off.

While  repetition may seem to have the same meaning as frequency, that is not how it is being used here. The most common forms of repetition I have found have more to do with concepts, ideas, actions and basic information. Once the reader knows the character has blonde hair, there is no need to repeatedly refer to "honey-blonde", "golden locks" or "sun-kissed tresses". As with all things writing-related, there are times repetition, echoes and redundancy is not only good, but necessary. When the "sun-burst tattoo on her upper right arm" is a passing hint in the first description, it may be imperative to remind the reader when it shows she's related to the villain about to kill your hero.

Of course, critters are especially useful in locating the words or phrases marring the readability of your story. We haven't read it before and can often spot that unneeded instance. Reading your work, exactly as it is written, or having someone else read it to you are other possible solutions.

These four oversights can lead to similar sentence structure, slow pace and flow, infringe with readability and ultimately contribute to reader boredom. While none of them are "wrong", increased awareness may change your story from good to great.

Posted by Lydia Harris 4 Apr 2016 at 03:56
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Kcm 4 Apr 2016 at 04:41  
Nicely presented, Lydia.

May I add a diagnostic technique I find useful—given that I use MICROSOFT WORD to pen my drafts? If I suspect I've fallen from grace in one of these matters, I will use WORD's Find/Replace function. I will say, for instance, find: at least. Replace with: at least. WORD will tell me how many replacements it made inflicting no unintended damage. I can then decide if I'm being paranoid or things need fixing. A repeat of the exercise after editing tells me if I'm yet under control.

Kevin
Comeaux 4 Apr 2016 at 07:25  
Good job, Lydia.

Donna

Jackster71 6 Apr 2016 at 13:17  
Thanks!


Cmefreeze 6 Apr 2016 at 18:46  
I peg overwordage as a real problem in, I'd say, 80 percent of crits, so this is a good reminder to folks. Like the proposed fixes, too, here. Good deal!
Fruitfly 7 Apr 2016 at 11:54  
Thank you so much for this post!!!! It's a great reminder on letting us be far enough from our work to bring it closer to clarity and a more powerful delivery. I personally loved how well this was written, short, sweet, and definitely mastered in the art of succinctness!!
Mayaone 10 Apr 2016 at 16:04  
Thank you. This was very helpful in my revision. I think echoes can be good and bad. Good if they are used in prose, bad if they are just a repeat of what you already told the reader. Aloha
Southerner 1 May 2016 at 09:01  
Thanks for the info, Lydia.

And Kevin, what a FANTASTIC idea! I just plugged those 2 words (4, actually) and found I had used them 28 times in my 104,000 word novel. In ten minutes I cut the number in half. So much quicker than plugging word(s) into search and inching along with no idea how many reps there are. Thanks.

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