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Your story sucks and I hope you die!!!
Most unfriendly yours,
I loved your story about a guy who sells his horse. The first sentence wasn't that good though, you should fix that.
I related strongly with the character, Charlie, but I don't think that his actions were totally believable in the end, I would change that part.
The horse was great and you wrote some great stuff about that.